11.5 - Evaluation

How appropriate is the script in relation to the brief?

The script is pretty accurate to the brief; the TV-show contains both male and female leads. We have put together a realistic opening scene for the show, Elizabeth, which could be shown on the streaming site Amazon Prime. The show is primarily a drama, as mentioned in the brief, with themes of crime and murder, which the entire show is based on, and is hinted at throughout each and every episode whilst more is revealed about what happened to the mysterious character Elizabeth. The show will attract large audiences who enjoy drama, because in the first few minutes of the show, characters are shown experiencing nightmares about strange events, although they are not informed as to what went wrong, but it also asks many questions which are answered in the following episodes. Our broad range of characters, ages and races will draw in a wide range of audiences.

What strengths and weaknesses have been identified in the drafting and feedback process?

We didn’t face many problems during the feedback process, although the main problem we encountered involved getting Mason to the shop where he meets Elizabeth in a realistic way. In the original draft Mason turns up late for work and is then sent out again by the head teacher to get tea bags. However, we thought this may be too unrealistic because it is unlikely a teacher would leave the school during school hours. After this feedback our team consolidated on how to work around this issue. Following this discussion we decided that Mason would not reach the school at all. Instead we decided to have Mason call into to his school and say that he’ll be pretty late, in response the head teacher will ask him to buy some tea bags on the way. We also decided to make it a training day at the school, so that the head teacher is more relaxed about Mason’s absence. The biggest strength received during feedback involved the dream that begins the episode, this was apparently due to the intriguing nature of the scene and the questions it asks.

How will the script appeal to the target audience?

The script will have mass appeal to the majority of audiences because there are both male and female characters that are prominent throughout the series. The show is based on a captivating story line that appeals to the audiences that enjoy drama and are drawn into detailed plots and interesting questions.

What are the main changes you have made through the drafting process?

The main change we made involved Mason getting to the shop without visiting the school at all to meet Elizabeth. We also changed the dialogue between most of the characters, for example, before we cut the school scene from the episode, we edited the dialogue between Mason and the head teacher so that it seemed like a more realistic and professional conversation. We also changed the dialogue so that it clearly establishes the boss-employee dynamic.