Monday 13 June 2016

11.5 - Evaluation

How appropriate is the script in relation to the brief?

The script is pretty accurate to the brief; the TV-show contains both male and female leads. We have put together a realistic opening scene for the show, Elizabeth, which could be shown on the streaming site Amazon Prime. The show is primarily a drama, as mentioned in the brief, with themes of crime and murder, which the entire show is based on, and is hinted at throughout each and every episode whilst more is revealed about what happened to the mysterious character Elizabeth. The show will attract large audiences who enjoy drama, because in the first few minutes of the show, characters are shown experiencing nightmares about strange events, although they are not informed as to what went wrong, but it also asks many questions which are answered in the following episodes. Our broad range of characters, ages and races will draw in a wide range of audiences.

What strengths and weaknesses have been identified in the drafting and feedback process?

We didn’t face many problems during the feedback process, although the main problem we encountered involved getting Mason to the shop where he meets Elizabeth in a realistic way. In the original draft Mason turns up late for work and is then sent out again by the head teacher to get tea bags. However, we thought this may be too unrealistic because it is unlikely a teacher would leave the school during school hours. After this feedback our team consolidated on how to work around this issue. Following this discussion we decided that Mason would not reach the school at all. Instead we decided to have Mason call into to his school and say that he’ll be pretty late, in response the head teacher will ask him to buy some tea bags on the way. We also decided to make it a training day at the school, so that the head teacher is more relaxed about Mason’s absence. The biggest strength received during feedback involved the dream that begins the episode, this was apparently due to the intriguing nature of the scene and the questions it asks.

How will the script appeal to the target audience?

The script will have mass appeal to the majority of audiences because there are both male and female characters that are prominent throughout the series. The show is based on a captivating story line that appeals to the audiences that enjoy drama and are drawn into detailed plots and interesting questions.

What are the main changes you have made through the drafting process?


The main change we made involved Mason getting to the shop without visiting the school at all to meet Elizabeth. We also changed the dialogue between most of the characters, for example, before we cut the school scene from the episode, we edited the dialogue between Mason and the head teacher so that it seemed like a more realistic and professional conversation. We also changed the dialogue so that it clearly establishes the boss-employee dynamic.

Thursday 14 April 2016

11.4 - Feedback & Draft 2

List of Changes

- Remove black and white choice
- Some vital information in script requires visual or vocal representation
- Remove accent specificities
- Primary school does not need to be as large as college
- Overly formal dialogue between headmaster and staff
- Unrealistic reason for Mason going to get coffee
- Last scene requires setup line

Draft 2




Thursday 10 March 2016

11.1 - Script Analysis



Style: This is a dark superhero movie about a broken man trying to reclaim his glorious reputation as the Batman.
Content: This page of from the script showcases an intense emotionally driven conversation between Bruce and his mentor Alfred.
Genre: The genre of the script is a drama, this is made clear by the intensity of the dialogue and the subject matter being discussed.
Target Audience: The target audience is primarily male due to the fact that the two characters being featured are male. The scene appeals to many different audiences due to the subject matter of relationships, something all humans can relate to and understand.

Little Miss Sunshine



Style: This is drama with light comedy spread throughout, it concerns a troubled family which through various circumstances end up going on a road trip together.
Content: The script discusses characters and locations primarily, such as when Richard has his age described, and the location is described in depth for production design purposes.
Genre: The genre of the script is a drama/comedy, this is made clear by the content of the dialogue and the subject matter being discussed.
Target Audience: The target audience is primarily mothers, father and families. This is because they are the groups being represented here

The Archers
The first page features the title and the episode number. It also includes credits for the writer, the editor and the director. It shows the recording date, the tape number and the date/week. This first page also identifies the various scenes and characters featured.


The second goes into further depth concerning the specific scene details such as the setting e.g. interior village hall alongside time stamp 2PM. It also provides dialogue between characters, setting up the relationships between said characters and the overarching plot.

The dialogue is varied between characters so that each cast member has enough to.

Sound effects are added in post following the script read from the cast.

Anything written in brackets is stage direction, names are applied to the left side of the script so that the actors know what to read, when to read it, and in what order.

Content: The script is about people who live on a farm, and the challenges they face whilst running it.
Style: This is a slow paced show which focuses on character drama, this is a good base for a long term running show.
Genre: This is a drama, it involves realistic situations being dealt with by realistic people. It has it's fair share of character dynamics.
Target Audience: The show is aimed for those who enjoy slow paced dramas about people who have to deal with family and job problems.

Game of Thrones






Content: This is a dark fantasy about a fictional continent named Westeros, specifically concerning the northmen who guard the wall from what lies beyond.
Style: These pages from the first episode showcase an intense scene as men are hunted down by mystical beings named 'The Others'.
Genre: The genre is fantasy drama, this is made clear by the fantastical creatures and the dialogue between characters.
Target Audience: The target audience is 18+ due to the graphic nature of the content being shown. This scene appeals to those who enjoy both fantasy stories and dramatic stories.

Friday 4 March 2016

11.2 - Ideas

Brief

You need to generate 3 detailed ideas for a new long form UK TV drama that uses the crime genre as a starting point. The program is being commissioned by Amazon Prime in order to attract a new customers drawing on the  audience being cultivated for high quality crime drama - particularly from the states and Europe. 

The show will be released as a complete series and viewers can choose to watch each episode individually or as a whole series.  The format of the show is 10 episodes of 55 minutes each, it must have a narrative structure that runs throughout the whole series. 

The show will need to have both a male and female lead actor. 

IDEA 1

Elizabeth

Mason Collins a young man from South-East of England meets a young woman, Ellie, of the same age and begins to become interested in her. Through the first episode we are given flashbacks to his past were we see him as a 10year old boy playing with a little girl, its soon revealed the little girl was murdered.
However he begins to believe the young woman is the little girl from his past and she was never killed and begins to question the events of the past.
Things get stranger however when he realises no one else can see the woman he’s now involved with and we begin to believe she’s a ghost coming back to solve the case on who killed her with his help.

More twists come to light when all the clues point to him being her killer and we begin to question if she’s a figment of his mind as a way to forgive himself for the crime he’s committed.

Location: South East, England

Time: 90’s + 80’s

Male Lead: Mason Collins, 22, British
Female Lead: Elizabeth ‘Ellie’ Sandra White, 21, British



IDEA 2
TITLE: LANDRISE
GENRE: CRIME, SPY, ACTION
LOCATION: LONDON
EPISODES: 3
CHANNEL: BBC
CHARACTERS:
- LAYMEY CONNED
- GARY MALTIBORN
- EVELYN CURRENCYPOUND
PLOT SYNOPSIS: When Laymey's latest crime mission goes terribly wrong, it leads to a calamitous turn of events. With the homeland compromised, Maltiborn turns to the one man he can trust; Conned. Aided only by his gadgets, Conned takes to the shadows and follows a trail to Evelyn, a crime lord from Maltiborn's past who wants to settle an old score.



IDEA 3
TITLE: NUMBERED
GENRE: CRIME, THRILLER, COMEDY
LOCATION: LOS ANGELES
EPISODES: 7
CHANNEL: CBS
CHARACTERS:
- WINTERISE
- DAVIN NILLZ
- TAMMY NILLZ
PLOT SYNOPSIS: When grumpy old inspector Winterise is called to inspect a awful event, he must team up with policeman Davin Nillz to discover the eight deadly truths behind the massacre. Along the way Davin's wife Tammy joins the duo with her own agenda.



TITLE: A GAME OF SHADOWS
ORIGINAL IDEA BY AARON MARCUS & AIDAN EGAN TRANTER
WRITTEN BY: AIDAN EGAN TRANTER
GENRE: CRIME, DRAMA, CONSPIRACY
LOCATION: EDINBURGH
AGE RANGE: 18-25
GENRE: CRIME, DRAMA
PERIOD: MODERN DAY

This show is a dark, mysterious character drama. It will feel like a mixture of Luther, Silent Witness and Sherlock. Each episode will feel very different due to the hiring of multiple directors. The show will primarily be filmed on location in London, Wales and Edinburgh. Additional photography will be shot at Pinewood studios for scenes with specifically built sets. The show's colour grading will feature low saturation and colours such as black, blue and grey. There will be little to no handheld photography, most shots will be filmed using tripods and cranes. This series has the potential to become the most viewed drama on Amazon Prime and the platform's flagship show. Competition for the show would include any other drama series released on an on-demand streaming service at around the same time such as House of Cards on Netflix.

TARGET AUDIENCE: The target audience for the show is both female and male; approximately 25-45 year olds. The target demographic ranges from 25 upwards because they will likely have disposable income. According to the Annual BARB audience report there is a growing market for drama series, especially in the fall. Time shifted viewing has increased, most notably drama, which accounts for 25% of all times shifted viewing. Drama also takes second place of most viewed genre at 16.7% of total audiences, after entertainment at 18.4%, proving there is a market for this kind of media.

EPISODES: 10
CHANNEL: AMAZON PRIME

FORM OUTLINE: This original series will be long form in structure, and it will premiere exclusively on Amazon Prime at some point in 2017.
CONTENT/STYLE: The genre of the series is crime/drama. It will be feature a mixture of handheld and still camerawork. The colour pallet will be largely blue with low saturation and temperature.
PRODUCT POTENTIAL: The closest competitors to this show will be series like Sherlock, Luther and Silent Witness.

PLOT SYNOPSIS: Gary Lowbow, an old lieutenant at the end of his reign, gets pulled back for one last homicide with rookie detective Iana Elmo. As one crime leads to another, Lowbow must peel back the layers of deceit to reveal the terrible truth behind the organisation Crypt.



CAST:
1.) - GARY LOWBOW (PROTAGONIST, MID-50s, DIVORCED, SOON TO RETIRE LIEUTENANT, SKEPTIC, AGNOSTIC, ANALOG, WAR VETERAN, OLD SCHOOL) (Aaron)



2.) - IANA ELMO (YOUNG PLUCKY DC, ARROGANT, UNSTABLE, UNDENIABLE POTENTIAL, RECOVERING ADDICT, OPTIMIST, ATHEIST, DIGITAL) (Alexa)


3.) - BISMARCK LAQUEESHA (HEAD OF CRYPT, ANTAGONIST, CRIME LORD, QUIET, WITHDRAWN, BELIEVES IN A HIGHER POWER, PURE FUNDAMENTALIST, WANTS TO RESTORE BALANCE, ANALOG) (Aidan Chesters)



CONCEPT ART:







EPISODE LAYOUT:

Episode 1 - 'One Last Case': Gary Lowbow finalises his employment paperwork whilst a new constable (Iana Elmo) causes conflict with the Superintendent. Before leaving Lowbow gets assigned one last case case alongside Elmo, but not everything about this crime is what it seems.

Episode 2 - 'Ignorance is Bliss': After taking Elmo under his wing, Lowbow must train her to control her emotions in the field. Following the recent spike of murders, Gary becomes obsessed with a connection between the recent string of homicides, and decides to stay on the force a little longer.

Episode 3 - 'The Shadows': Whilst on her day off D.C. Elmo is abducted by cloaked figures at Churchum castle. At the station Lowbow hears whispers of a criminal organisation based in the heart of Edinburgh. Following Elmo's disappearance Gary heads to the castle.

Episode 4 - 'Chain of Command': Elmo escapes her attackers and tells Lowbow of a underground army that plans to attack the city, and of their leader Bismarck Laqueesha. Lowbow takes the case up the chain of command but faces opposition from the superintendent.

Episode 5 - 'Our Finest Hour'Lowbow rebels with three of his best to investigate Churchum castle. Elmo meets an unknown D.I. and is questioned heavily. Whilst the trio investigates, they are also abducted by the cloaked figures. The new D.I. encourages the superintendent to take extreme action.

Episode 6 - 'Face to Face'Lowbow meets with Laqueesha for the first time, Laqueesha attempts to recruit Lowbow into Crypt. Suddenly an army of police brake into the castle and flush out Laqueesha along with his men. Now believing Gary, the superintendent pledges to find Laqueesha. Lowbow leaves confused as to why Crypt decided to leave.

Episode 7 - 'For Your Consideration'The police force returns to their station only to find it in ruins. Realising the rescue was a distraction, the superintendent sends his forces out to find Laqueesha and his army. Lowbow takes the wounded officers to the hospital and meets with Elmo. She tells Gary of how an unknown D.I. destroyed the station and killed everyone there. Suddenly all the electricity in the hospital dies...

Episode 8 - 'Let Battle Commence'Edinburgh falls into chaos as all forms of communication cease. Gary figures that Laqueesha has utilised an EMP to rob the city of it's electricity. Lowbow and Elmo decide to hunt down Laqueesha and stop him before he completes his mission. Before long Laqueesha begins his attack on the city, his army rises, and his missiles fire.

Episode 9 - 'Locked Antlers'Streets fill with bodies, Laqueesha takes out hundreds of innocent civilians. Lowbow and Elmo discover Laqueesha's data banks in the crypt of Churchum castle. Laqueesha's technological hub provides Lowbow the location of Laqueesha and his weakness hyperacusis. The attacks continue as Elmo and Lowbow make their way through the bloodbath that is downtown Edinburgh.

Episode 10 - 'End of the Line'The end has come, the final showdown. Lowbow confronts Laqueesha in the rubble of their station. Lowbow plays loud feedback through a portable speaker temporarily weakening Laqueesha. Elmo reveals herself to be a double agent, secretly working for Laqueesha and attacks Lowbow. Laqueesha attempts to escape but Lowbow tackles him down and stabs his leg. Elmo attacks Lowbow and he is forced to kill her. Following Laqueesha's arrest, Crypt falls apart.

‘A Game of Shadows’ Key Scene Analysis – Extract Episode 10
Scene 19 – ‘The Finale’

Gary Lowbow and Iana Elmo run into their desolate police station, Laqueesha and his men order them to drop their weapons. Now within range, Lowbow sets his speaker off via voice command. The screeching sound of feedback fills the room, Laqueesha collapses in pain. All of a sudden, Elmo strikes Lowbow in the back of his head. Elmo then deactivates the speaker and reveals her treacherous activities to Lowbow. She reveals that it was her who blew up the police station and warned Laqueesha of Lowbow’s plans. That is how Laqueesha knew to evacuate the castle and set the trap in the station. Lowbow in shock decides to stab Elmo, but Laqueesha attempts to escape. Lowbow reactivates the device and Laqueesha falls. Seeing the tide turn, Laqueesha’s men abandon him and exit the building. Lowbow confronts Laqueesha, and is asked if he’ll be killed, to which Lowbow claims he’ll live out his days behind bars. Following Laqueesha’s arrest, his army scatters in fear. Peace in Edinburgh is restored.











Aaron's Idea

16.3 Developed Idea - The Chain

Original Idea: Aaron Marcus and Aidan Egan Tranter
Written by: Aaron Marcus
Working Title: The Chain
Genre: Crime, Drama
Location: Central London
Target Audience: 20-40 year olds
Running time: 50-55 mins
No. of episodes: 10

The Chain is an original, long form TV drama intended for release on an online streaming platform (Netflix or Amazon Prime TV).

The show is a dark, crime drama. It will look and feel like a mixture of Sherlock (BBC) and The Fall (BBC). Each episode will feel very heavy and dark. It will predominantly be filmed on location around the outskirts of London with some scenes, if needed, in a studio. The show's colours will be quite dark blues, blacks and greys with low saturation. There will be very little handheld shots, most of them on a tripod and only with close-up shots when the audience needs to know a specific detail.

The show has potential to become the most watched drama on Amazon Prime TV or Netflix. Other competitors would include any drama released at the same time online and also the 9/10pm Sunday night drama on the BBC or ITV.

The target audience for this show is both male and female, 25-40 year olds. The target demographic starts at 25 because they will most likely have a reduced disposable income and/or have children. So will not have the chance to go out, leaving them most likely to stay in and watch TV. According the Annual BARB viewing report (2015) there is a growing market for TV drama, especially in the winter. Time shifted viewing has increased, most notably drama, which accounts for 25% of all times shifted viewing. Drama also takes second place of most viewed genre at 16.7% of total audiences, after entertainment at 18.4%, proving there is a market for this kind of media. The BARB report also states how subscribers of online streaming platforms such as Netflix are non-digital natives, which further fits in with out target audience.

Synopsis: Two Scotland Yard based detectives solve a series of crimes which lead to a notorious villain. One
of them becomes so committed that he ignores his family and the bonds between his wife and kids start to
crumble. We also follow an underestimated junior detective as she tries to prove herself to the others. She
often does much of the work but all the credit is taken by people higher up.


Characters:


Steve Marshall - Detective 
Married, mid-40s, 2 kids and a wife. Very up front guy, can easily get grumpy/mad. He becomes so devoted to the case that he starts to become separated from his family, which builds tension between them, which also drives him away. Also in an affair with.




Morgan Freeman - Detective
Married, early 40s, 3 kids and a wife, very close to his family. Much more sensitive guy, often lets his gut guide him through the investigation. Him and the first detective are good friends, they met at the police academy. He understands Steve like nobody else.



Nadyia Young - Junior detective
Single, late 20s/early 30s, works for Steve and Morgan. Has great detective skills but often underestimated by Steve and Morgan. She is trying to prove herself to them, does a lot of the work but Steve and Morgan take most of the credit. In an affair with Steve.




Ronnie Ripper - Crime Villain
Notorious for being ruthless, holds a grudge. Very well kept but also likes to do his own dirty work on occasion. Not much else is known about him. Nobody knows his real identity or age.





Each episode will also include various extra for background including police, detectives, members of the public, victim/victims family and associates of Ronnie Ripper.


Mood board:


Episode Layout:

E.101: Steve and Morgan are assigned to a case, the apparent suicide of a known drug dealer/thug. However
they soon discover it was actually homicide. They find 'marks' left on the body that have been commonly
asscociated with Ronnie Ripper, the victim has their left index finger missing as well as their right first toe.
We learn that Steve and Nadyia are together.

E.102: We learn that the police have an informant who is close to Ronnie, and Ronnie tries to find out who it
is. They continue to investigate the homicide and we learn that Steve also has wife kids - his relationship with
Nadyia is an affair. They find some fingerprints at the scene, but find out the owner of them was actually on
a night out with friends. They talk to an informant which leads them to discover a man has been planting
different fingerprints at the scene of the crime to lead detectives off his trail.

E.103: A woman is murdered in her flat in London. It is the informant. Once again, fingerprints were planted
at the scene and the same marks are found on her body. Morgan finds out about Steve's affair and tries to tell
him to stop. We flash back to the police academy where Steve and Morgan met and Morgan is trying to talk
Steve out of a previous affair.

E.104: Tension rise between Steve and his wife. He is spending so much time on the case/seeing Nadyia that
he is spending less time at home, and not seeing his wife and kids. This causes him to stay at work longer
because he doesn't want to see his wife. They discover a frequently used phone number in the informants
phone, which could be Ronnie Rippers, so they trace/monitors the call.

E.105: Surveillance of the phone number leads them to a laundry in London. A search of the premises reveals
an empty basement with burnt paper work. They manage to extract an address from an envelope. The first
name on the envelope is mostly burnt but "Ro" can clearly be seen above the address. Finger prints that were
found at previous crime scenes are also found here which lead the detectives to think this was Ronnie's old
base/hideout. Steve's wife starts to suspect he may be having an affair so starts to investigate where he's been
for the last few weeks.

E.106: They raid the house of the address found at the laundry but turns out to be completely wrong . The
guess that the address must have been planted in the basement. This puts them off because they then have to
go back a few steps in the process and deal with the media frenzy that are enjoying the fact the police raided
the wrong house. Steve's wife finds out he hasn't been playing poker every Thursday night like he says he has.

E.107: After pouring over the cases for days and not finding any new information, they are just about to give
up. But a man calls in with some information. He owes Ronnie money and his wife has been taken hostage.
They use the phone number Ronnie called the man on to trace him to an abandoned warehouse on the outskirts
of the city. Steve's wife asks Marshall where steve goes after work, Marshall tells her he thought Steve went
home to her. She starts to become more suspicious.

E.108: They give Ronnie the money for the man's wife so she is released. They then place surveillance on the
warehouse and anyone who goes in/out. Steve's wife decides to find out where he goes instead of to poker,
so hires a babysitter and follows him when he leaves work. Steve goes into a restaurant where he meets
Nadyia. Steve's wife sees them kissing and realises he is having an affair.

E.109: Together with voice recordings from phone calls and witness descriptions they manage to identify
Ronnie Ripper and known associates. They move in for a raid but Ronnie leaves the warehouse and manages
to shake undercover recon operatives in traffic through the  city. They then track down a known associate
of Ronnie's and bribe the whereabouts of Ronnie's new hideout out of the associate.

E.110: Following intelligence gained they finally track down Ronnie Ripper. They set up a raid but Ronnie sees
them again and takes off in a car at high speed. After a brief car chase across the city, he crashes and they
catch him. Steve's wife decides to leave after finding out about the affair with Nadyia.


Key Scene: E.110 - Scene 19
Location: Harringay Warehouse District
Time of Day:Late Morning/early afternoon
Weather:minimal cloud cover/not bright sun
Sequence of events:
Two police vans and a police cpoopar pull up. Swat teams exit the vans and run to surround the building, Inaudible
radio chatter can be heard over the loading of rifles. Steve and Morgan stay in the car and co-ordinate the
attack via radio. In a moment of calm and silence, they are about to give the go-ahead to storm the building
but a car suddenly rushes out of the back of the building, Steve sees that it is Ronnie driving and starts the
police car, following in pursuit. They start to head into the centre of a small town, swerving in and out of
traffic. Ronnies driving is erratic and he starts to loose control of the car, hitting walls and scraping/bashing
other cars. Other drivers are swerving out the way, beeping their horns. He eventually crashes into a bollard
and cannot get out because the car door is jammed from the crash. Steve and Marshall pull up behind Ronnie
and run to the car, pistols drawn. The swat teams arrive, surround the car, shouting, rifles raised and arrest
Ronnie.